Tuesday, September 20, 2016
haunted story
Once upon a time there was a man called BoB he was THE only person brave then he went with his car to THE deep dark forest that had grampy wolfs with foggy trees that was so whomagest that could not ever come off so he was walking through the forest then he STOPPED look around causa he could hear some grumpy wolfs then BoB was charging to go back but he doesn't remember which way to go so BoB was so frightened that he thought he could not go back causa the wof they were blocking his way that he can't get out then BoB clambered the tree so BoB stayed there for half an answer to the grumpy dogs went away until BoB was firstly he wanted some water so he twined his way back home with his amazing car that was on the side of the haunted tree but he was the only man on earth walking towards the haunted place,
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writing,
year 4 TPS
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Oh my goodness Maria, your writing has improved so much! I love how you have used so many powerful words like grumpy wolves, clambered up the tree, charging, so frightened, deep dark forrest, humungous. Amazing! It makes your writing so interesting!
ReplyDeleteNext steps - where are your full stops? I know you wrote them in your book, but where are they on here?